Darryl McCray, or ‘Cornbread’, his street name, is one of
the unsung pioneers of the Hip-Hop culture. He started daubing his name on the
streets of Philadelphia back in 1967. ‘I first started writing graffiti in the
halls of a juvenile institution when I was 10 years old’. Cornbread was one of
the first graffiti artist to be known, but from this he didn’t know what he had
started and this culture would spread to every corner of the world. When he got
out, he met a girl called Cynthia, who he uses to like a lot. He first started
writing ‘Cornbread loves Cynthia’ on walls all over the neighborhood. She just
knew him as Darryl.
Cornbread - One of the pioneers of the Hip-Hop Culture.
This is a piece of work by Cornbread. He was one of the first ever graffiti artist to spray on the streets. I began this back in 1967, on the streets of Philadelphia.
Banksy's 'No Future' Graffiti work.
This is a piece of amazing work by Banksy. When you first look at this when it makes you think about what it means. You can see the girl is sad, so this must be in the meaning. I think that this work is about poorer countries that are at war. This girl is stuck in the middle of it all, and has no future.
My writing re-written form the notes I received
Cornbread, or his real name Darryl McCray, is one of the
unsung pioneers of the Hip-Hop culture. ‘I first started writing graffiti in
the halls of a juvenile institution when I was 10 years old’. The streets of
Philadelphia were the first days where he started daubing his names on walls
back in 1967. The culture that he started began to spread across to every
corner of the world, however, he did not know what he had started. When he got
out, he met a girl called Cynthia, who he uses to like a lot. He first started
writing ‘Cornbread loves Cynthia’ on walls all over the neighborhood. She just
knew him as Darryl.
When I got my work back, I had a few notes on it; It was
good information about the artist that I had written about, was concise, was
engaging and was very too the point. I was happy with these notes back from my
peer. However, I had a few improvements to make and one was to word it
differently and see if it would work better. So above is the new paragraph that
I have written and I am much happier with this version.